How do you find buyers who are searching for your products? That’s the holy grail for marketers online.
1. Remember our own buyer mindset: when WE are looking for something, we want it ASAP. A seller must learn to facilitate that desire for immediate gratification. Here’s how the big guys have done it offline.
2. Big stores took years to learn to set up departments, and then, more departments within departments. It’s so common today we forget how many steps these stores have set up for us to make it quicker to find the one thing we want – in the midst of that big mass of things they have (that they also want to sell us). Take this typical shoe shopping routine.
Lulu wants new tennis shoes. She goes to Nordstrom and
1) finds the shoe department in the store, then goes to
2) women’s shoes, then to
3) type of shoe, then
4) size
5) brand, and
6) color.The sales person brings out only the 5 pairs that match what she wants to buy – out of 5,000 pairs of shoes in the store. She doesn’t rummage through any of those.
Network Marketer’s dilemma:
1. When you try to sell everything to everyone, you get no one.
2. When you try to sell one specific thing, you get almost no one.
BIG difference. “Almost no one” can make you money. No one makes you zip.
Exercise: How would you describe that one thing you sell, product or business, so that someone who’s looking for it, might actually find it?
You get three lines (Google Adword format)
Line one (header): 25 characters or less
Line two: 35 characters.
Line three: 35 characters
Characters are letters, commas, and spaces.
That’s it. The readers will tell you if it’s someone’s size 8 or not. It’s not about making a match for as many as possible, it’s about making a match at all – you know, for the ‘almost no ones.’
Winner gets a 6 month subscription to the iGaggle Network. (Worth $203 for the Select Membership; $87 for the Registry membership.)
UPDATE: Nearly every ad here is from the SELLER’s point of view. All about how great THEIR stuff is. To get a buyer’s attention, you need to write copy from THE BUYER’s point of view. Much trickier. And much more effective.

LIKE A REALLY GOOD STEAK?
Know They Are Worth The Extra $?
Gourmet Taste? Call 850-261-8321.
Tom – I wonder how many people would actually search for that – “like a really good steak” I know that is what you are selling, but what people search for and what you say you sell are not the same.
I’d want a website to see first what makes them worth the “extra $”
I’d never call the number, because I’d expect to be sold hard at the other end. I’d want more info first, online and without pressure, to see what makes these steaks special.
That’s me. Maybe others will react differently. It’s pretty seller-sided, to me.
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Do you know anyone who has migraines?
I got rid of mine. Interested? 5099454433
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While it is 110 degrees outside I am shopping for my size 6 black Skechers while seated in my comfy office chair, sipping iced tea.
I’m not afraid of being rear-ended while shopping My Power Mall like I was last week on my way to a mall in Phoenix.
If comfort and safety are important to you take a look. Your shoe is almost certain to be available.
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Rose
Natural Energy For Moms
Try Before You Buy – 5 Day Sample
Check Out
Did I do ok?
Blessings,
Kassandra
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See http://www.lauraspota.myarbonne.com
Make My PC Run Fast Again
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Free Report: Trouble-Free Computing
Anti-aging wrinkle iron.
Erase the past resist the future.
Look 10 years younger in 10 minutes. 1-888-320-6482
Rose: Fit your copy into the Google Adsense format. Pick something special for that header…to attract attention.
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Fun products used in 80% of homes.
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Liquid Vitamin & Minerals
Your body is like a sponge
Soak Up Superior Nutrition
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Stop Listening to HYPE…
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For Business:
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Cosmetics, Personal and Health care
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$ For Restaurant Start-Up
You like people, so let’s use your
great personality as a source of $.
Kids Picky Eaters?
Whole food nutrition that kids love
Fruits and veggies in gummy treats
http://www.GoodHealthMadeSimple.com
Greeting Cards Made Easy
Send REAL Greeting Cards With The
Click of A Mouse – From Your House
http://www.ConnectionCards.com
Kathleen
P.S. I’m new to this group.
Helping Moms Stay Home
Call 913-345-0185
http://www.helpingmoms-stayhome.com
(This is actually a ‘billboard’ I have on my car and I know it works because I get calls 🙂
Comments:
Darlene,
If I were suffering from migraines I would call that number.
Kassandra:
everybody claims more energy and fewer wrinkles, but I like the
try before you buy!
Anyway, here’s mine.
The last line is lame, may tweak later.
Slim summer, fat winter?
Dark skies make me crave carbs.
I found some herbs that help me.
http://wildhealing.net
Natural Migraine Relief
I didn’t want to take meds anymore
http://suzanne.networkmarketingcentral.com
Simply Eat Better – Simply
Sound good for your health?
Whole food in capsules. Imagine?
(Shoot — the first line is supposed to be a hyperlink to my site, http://www.wholefoodcapsules.com, but I can’t make it work — ? Hhhmm, unless it’s going to print that way and just doesn’t show in this comment box??)
Anyway, thanks for keeping us thinking, Kim!
Dianne
Attention: Women who read
product labels. Do you insist
on certified organic like I do?
http://www.elyorganics.com
Hey Kim,
not sure if my ad is over the limit..if it’s over the limit I would have to take off my website address and just have a live link in my headline.
Regards,
Erin
In Greek:
Μπαμπάς 26ετών στο Κιλκίς
Δείχνει σε νέους γονείς πως να
κερδίζουν 943€/μήνα με 3ώρες/μέρα
In English(translation – i don’t use it in English, only Greek):
Dad 26year-old in Kilkis
Shows young parents how to
earn 943€/month with 3hours/day
This is my ad that i have used for more than a year with the same great result. It fits in Google adwords in Greek. I don’t know if the translation gives the same meaning but it sounds interesting and different in Greek.
I have used this ad and with the right keywords, the right website and the right language, i am able to attract more qualified people. I am signing up about 1 of every 8 leads i get.
Before i change my ad and website, i was recruiting one out of every 30 or 50 leads.
Huge difference.
Well, what do you think? Does it attract a specific enough group of people?
Theodore From Greece
How about this?
Savor your family moments
Busy families bond in easy ways
Fun traditions – http://www.MadeToSavor.com
Savor life’s best,
Aimee, Indep. Consultant
Once Upon A Family
In Greek:
Mpampas 26eton sto Kilkis
Deixnei se neous goneis pos na
kerdizoun 943E/mina me 3ores/mina
In English(translation – i don’t use it in English, only Greek):
Dad 26year-old in Kilkis
Shows young parents how to
earn 943E/month with 3hours/day
This is my ad that i have used for more than a year with the same great result. It fits in Google adwords in Greek. I don’t know if the translation gives the same meaning but it sounds interesting and different in Greek.
I have used this ad and with the right keywords, the right website and the right language, i am able to attract more qualified people. I am signing up about 1 of every 8 leads i get.
Before i change my ad and website, i was recruiting one out of every 30 or 50 leads.
Huge difference.
Well, what do you think? Does it attract a specific enough group of people?
Theodore From Greece
Second Draft:
$ For Restaurant Start-Up
People enjoy you, so let’s use your
great personality as a source of $.
Kim I have several ideas but due to the Aug 21st dog food recall here’s what I went with.
This is a real recall- I posted a link on my igaggle profile.
http://www.IKilledMyDog.com
Dog Food Can Kill Slowly
or in days-New recall Aug 21,07
Info how to choose safe dog food
Pet Lovers Making Money
Help make healthy pets-earn money
marketing healthy natural pet food
Dear Kim,
I would say this:
Now I’m in better shape
I tried eating less and increasing
my exercise but it didn’t seem to…
I appreciate the opportunity you are giving us to express our thoughts. It’s really fun and revealing for me to do this kind of exercise. Thank you.
With much respect,
Edgard
No More Grumpy Mom
Moms happy juice-natural & organic
A few oz. a day keeps the blues away
http://www.GoYinforSuccess.com
ok, here’s mine.
BUSINESS:
Dreaming of having your own
business but think you can’t afford
it?
Call xxx-xxx-xxxx No Whiners please!
PRODUCTS:
Want a younger face but don’t want
plastic surgery? You could see a younger
face after using Nu Skin. xxx-xxx-xxxx.
I hope the formatting is right! It’s hard to tell. 🙂
Eunice
Green and really cleans
No fumes to hurt the kids
Check it out http://www.shaklee.net/freeasabird/getclean
Kim, I have a question before I post my contest entry.
Many of the entries here so far have used 4 lines…most are listing their website on that line.
Are entries with 4 lines going to be considered for this contest, or just those with 3 lines and the correct amount of characters used in the google adword format?
Thanks for clarifying! Karen
Losing your hair?
Tried everything?
Try xxx.xxx.xxxx
Just commenting on everybody’s: I see too few people making use of Kim’s brilliant insights.
Too much generic MLM stuff. Maybe that’s just me being jaded.
I was so excited 10 years ago.
Too many ads still call out to everybody.
“In better shape” is too general.
Better to state something you can do now because of that.
“no more grumpy Mom” I like, “picky eaters” get my attention, “women who read product labels”, good one but will it fit?
Theodor, are you actually making that much? If so, you go man. Straight out of “Big AL”. If it works, it works.
Bobbie, how about reversing those lines? No fumes to hurt the kids
gets my attention, more than the
other.
Not trying to be critical, just giving feedback from a reader’s perspective.
I am calling out specifically to women who lose weight every summer and get it back every winter, because they start craving carbs
like I do.
Second try.the little number line
is a way to count your space.
1234567890123456789012345
Slim summer, fat winter?
Dark skies make me crave carbs.
Metabazon gives me a chance.
http://wildhealing.net
Help for Inner Bear Woman
Slim in summer, fat in winter?
Metabazon helps my cravings.
http://wildhealing.net
Here’s a variation of my previous ad .. hoping the website address on the fourth line is OK:
Greeting Cards Made Easy
With The Click of A Mouse Send REAL
Greeting Cards – From Your House
http://www.ConnectionCards.com
Or, what about this one?
Never Forget a Birthday
Create Custom Greeting Cards
From Your Computer, 24/7
http://www.ConnectionCards.com
Best regards,
Kathleen
Unique Gift Ideas!
Purses, Candles, Bracelets, Note
Cards,etc. http://www.mythirtyone.com/jane
Paper Greeting Cards
Connecting with friends and family
Without leaving home. Not e-cards.
SLEEP DEPRIVED & SLUGGISH
like I was? This juice helps me,
maybe U 2? http://www.pioneeringhealth.com
Hi Kim,
Thank you for encouraging me to think. How about…
Statistics grim for women
I don’t want to live in poverty.
Baby boomer women could…
New car runs over skunk
Odious car in garage
Smell comes into house
Thanks again
Karen Holritz
I notice that others have submitted edited versions of their ads. Rewriting is always a good idea to zero in on the objective of the ad. In my case, it’s to capture CUSTOMER lead info. I actually used the headline as a Google inquiry to see how many other ads would appear, and the results count (41,900,000). My revision:
Make My PC Run Fast Again
Free white paper on the cause & cure of most computer problems.
http://www.SafeWebAction.com
I market a service for people who want their computers to run smoothly without having to take them in for repair every few months; and who are concerned about their privacy and safety.
Problems in the Bedroom?
Stop making these 7 major mistakes.
Learn more. Book your Passion Party
Att: Future Centenarians.
My grannies passed away in 80’s.
I am going to 120. What about you?
Who else wants to add
Gold Years onto their life
safely and 100% naturally?
Discover the secret
for enjoyable natural sleep,
like I have every night.
Who else wants to enjoy
part time business income
greater then full time job salary?
High-flying? Me too.
I have boarded high-speed cruise.
Do you want a ticket?
Third Draft:
Restaurant Start-Up Funds
People love YOUR GREAT PERSONALITY.
Use it as a GREAT SOURCE OF CASH.
steve bollenbach-
I don’t understand what you are selling nor who your audience is…
Janette-great except for the “book your passion party’ it makes it suddenly sales-y. Consider linking to your NMC profile instead, more mysterious.
On meds for migraines?
Want natural relief instead?
http://suzanne.networkmarketingcentral.com
Cancer survivor?
My father too. Then I felt helpless
Now I know how to help recover.
Kim,
My target is a budding entrepreneur who is looking for funding (i.e. investment capital) for their New Restaurant idea.
As I understand so far, Google Ads are activated when specific search terms are used, or when a surfer lands on a specific page.
With some research, maybe I can find specific “places” on the net where these folks might go hunting, or maybe I can narrow done some keywords that they may use to search for funding sources.
Just an idea…
Steve
MOMS BUY HOUSES
Real Estate investment training
Earn while you learn 888-289-6804
Kim,
The idea was for the surfer to click through to a landing page that would quickly explain how they could turn their great personality into the cash that they need for their new venture (New Restaurant).
I thought it was a great idea, but maybe not, huh? 🙂
LOVE your material, Kim. Cheers.
Steve
GOT A PASSION FOR CANDLES
Satiate your passion AND earn MONEY
Come see how: thecandlegenie.com
This is one of my most successful Google Adwords ads:
No, It’s Not a Scam
I make more money in this business
than as a $200 per hour consultant.
Number1HomeBusiness.Net
What’s interesting about this ad is that it’s been successful (see stats below), not when people have searched for the keywords I chose (the name of my company followed by “scam”) but on the Google *Content* network, i.e., the Adsense ads that appear on most websites these days.
I’m not sure exactly why this ad has worked so well on Content sites but I have a couple of hypotheses:
1) Although it’s just me saying it, for some reason asserting, “No, it’s not a scam” attracts attention.
2) I didn’t realize it until Kim asked me a great question in another ad-writing contest she held recently but I think maybe this ad works because it more readily appeals to my best target audience: Other professionals and business owners for whom making “more than $200 per hour” is something they can relate to and desire.
In other words, instead of going after every opportunity seeker under the sun, I’m appealing to already successful folks for whom making $200 per hour is either what they’re already doing or it’s within their reach–but it’s not enough.
Some people probably think, “I’d love to make $200 an hour, give me that” but I’m targeting the folks who think, “Yeah, I want to make more than $200 per hour too.”
—–
For the statistically oriented:
On the Google Content network the above ad has had a 5.47% CTR (Click Through Rate) over the last 7 days; at $0.17 CPC (Cost Per Click); with a 3.03% CR (Conversion Rate), resulting in a $5.46 cost per conversion (cost per lead).
I should note that $5.46 per lead is a good price for me to pay because I earn a minimum $900 per sale in my business.
Mark
—
Mark D. Worthen, Psy.D.
Charlotte, North Carolina
Toll Free: 877-349-1726
Skype: mark.worthen
Steve b- so what are you selling? I’m still dense on that…
Mark – thanks for the good ad AND stats…
A few of these ads call my name but with some tweaking I would for sure at least visit a website for more info.
I want see what Suzanne has for her migraines that’s drug free. I liked both her ads but the last one was short and to the point.
Jeanine’s vacations made me stop and look but the “Cheap” in the header kind of scared me.
Kathleen was on track with her greeting cards. I just needed a stonger header.
Erin has my attention right away.
Like Michele, I have a son that’s a picky eater. Not so sure about the “Kids Love” part. My son is picky about everything. I would still check out her product.
By the way the Google Ads will have your website on line 4 so that gives you more useful text to describe your product, service or business.
When writing anything with a limit on characters it’s easiest to work with it in Microsoft Word or a program that has word count options.
I’m far from knowing much about google ads, this is just my feeling about the ads that called my name.
Actually Kim, I don’t have a home yet, but I’m considering MXI Corp (and maybe Paula Pritchard?), so that would mean I would be selling Healthy Chocolate.
My thought, however, was that the product was irrelevant at this point.
My thought was that I could first sell the idea of creating a predictable, residual income through a business model that the prospect may not have yet considered, and that I could possibly sell the prospect on a debt-free source of funding for their restaurant idea that would reduce their risk to zip, and maybe even open some doors that may not have been opening before. (It can be tough to find financing for a small business.)
If the prospect likes the business model – if they like the idea of a leveraged, steady cash flow as their source of funding – and if they can see themselves tapping into their excellent people skills in this way, then perhaps they could also fall in love with my yummy product, too…?
ENTER The Product, Company, Upline, and Training Resources…
Steve
A Healthier Tomorrow
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Dog food worries?
Info for pet lovers who want to
know how to pick healthy dog food
http://www.iKilledMyDog
Google will have my website on line four, I added it just to show the finished ad.
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